Broken Wings

Chapter Four – Jozokas was suddenly in the room, pulling Kayen against him. Ky simply glanced in their direction before turning to look at me and Jamia. As soon as ...

Hey guys~, I took a break from my studying for finals (I keep getting headaches from it e___e ) and wrote two more chapters. (Yay me! ). For the first ...

Oh, I think the beginning is much better! Again, must say this story is wonderful. I can't wait until the second chapter! Good luck, and keep writing (the second chapter)~! ...

Dashing through the trees I could smell his scent intoxicating me. It wrapped around me, covering every part of my body. I breathed it in and closed my eyes, letting ...

I'm eating breading that smells like nail polish, and tastes just a little like it as well. Don't trust Italians, people, they put nail polish in their bread. D=

...Who is...Fred? o___O

Also the ending seemed a little unexplained. I was curious as to whether she was dreaming that she visited her grave while she was drinking the wine in her home? ...

Ooo, thanks for all the critique and compliments! There were several mentions that the beginning was...out of place, so to say. But, is it really? :? I really like the ...

Hey there. I don't usually write short stories, but this sort of came out of no where. Feel free to critique all you want. :wink: Note: I know this is ...

I agree with Miyaviloves. It IS very cliche. And it is also kind of...blah. You don't feel the emotions that you should be feeling with this poem, and there is ...

Chapter Two — I could hear the teacher lecturing the class, but everything she said was flying right over my head. I wasn’t even trying to pay attention- I was ...

I think everyone else got everything...but it was lovely. I love the imagery... and nice vocab.

the writers on YWS are slowly going insane...

Well, if you read all the rules and TOS, I'm sure you'll do fine! Welcome to YWS! I hope you enjoy your stay, and I hope your stay is long ...

Oh Griffin, I think you need to chip some of your ego off xD I got a short story published in the children's magazine 'Cricket' once. But that's it. I ...